my untitled song...

[Veggi Girl]

Ok, so this is untitled because... I didn't feel like coming up with a title for it? You guys wanna help me out on that one? lol. Tell me what you think. I only have lyrics, as soon as I can get together with someone who knows guitar and who I am comfortable with showing my work to, I'll get a recording put up here... Hopefully that will be soon... Or maybe I'll just see if Ryan's band wants to play it... lol... here it is. tell me what you think even if you hate it.

I'm pulling my hair
Life is so unfair.
In a town full of meth
I'm thinking about death

Eyeliner running down my face
Damn I feel so out f place.
Invisible wounds cut too deep
I'm sick of crying myself to sleep.

You can't see my wrists are bleeding
You can't feel the pain I'm feeling.
You see me smile and my wrists look fine
All the blood is in my mind.

Eyeliner running down my face
Damn I feel so out f place.
Invisible wounds cut too deep
I'm sick of crying myself to sleep.

Torture me until I scream
Make me wish this was a dream.
Everyone else does and you're being left out
Inside I'm drowning in self doubt.

Eyeliner running down my face
Damn I feel so out f place.
Invisible wounds cut too deep
I'm sick of crying myself to sleep.

Eyeliner running down my face
Damn I feel so out f place.
Invisible wounds cut too deep
I'm sick of crying myself to sleep.


Ok, there it is. it's not as good as it could be, it needs tweeked a bit. lol. but, tell me what you think i could maybe work on as far as style goes or anything. thanks

[Taylorrrr]

it's good....my only niggle would be changing the" damn i feel so our of place" just be like I FEEL SO OUT OF PLACE or find another word...

[stars mystify]

omg this is amazing GDF!!!

[Veggi Girl]

thanks. i really need to find time to write more. i feel like ive been really busy lately

[Unpredictable]

That's awesome. I wouldn't change a thing.